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He stands alone
Over in the corner,
Watching the others
As they only ignore him.

She stands alone
In the girls stall,
Tears in her eyes 
As she tries to calm down.

They stand alone,
Outside the crowd,
Watching the world
Go by without them.
Not my best piece, but this is what came to my mind.
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pigtaildragongirl Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
This is.. really nice. :3 Your poems always convey such strong emotion with so little words. Its amazing.
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you~
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pigtaildragongirl Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
Your welcome!
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blessedout Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really enjoyed this one because it makes me think how alone they are, without really being alone. They are both outcasts together, but are separate... made me wish he would find her so they wouldn't have to be separate anymore. :)
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student Writer
Yeah? I'm not sure what I was thinking when I wrote this, honestly. I think I was looking at my friend and her brother, and how they're both outcasts, away from everyone else.
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blessedout Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww... :(
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
Yeah, it's pretty sad.
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blessedout Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:(
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Natureisnatural Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
This is great. ^^
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you~ Hug 
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