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He stands alone
Over in the corner,
Watching the others
As they only ignore him.

She stands alone
In the girls stall,
Tears in her eyes 
As she tries to calm down.

They stand alone,
Outside the crowd,
Watching the world
Go by without them.
Not my best piece, but this is what came to my mind.
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Angelsnowywolf8 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2014  Student Writer
That's a sad but good poem.
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you
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Angelsnowywolf8 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome.
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FireflyElixer Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
This is.. really nice. :3 Your poems always convey such strong emotion with so little words. Its amazing.
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you~
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FireflyElixer Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
Your welcome!
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blessedout Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really enjoyed this one because it makes me think how alone they are, without really being alone. They are both outcasts together, but are separate... made me wish he would find her so they wouldn't have to be separate anymore. :)
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student Writer
Yeah? I'm not sure what I was thinking when I wrote this, honestly. I think I was looking at my friend and her brother, and how they're both outcasts, away from everyone else.
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blessedout Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awww... :(
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
Yeah, it's pretty sad.
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blessedout Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:(
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Natureisnatural Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
This is great. ^^
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you~ Hug 
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HomuraAkemiTheHero Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
This is actually really good I find it to be relatable actually since I don't talk to anyone in school. I'm normally called "the girl who reads books all day" and even then it's hard when the quiet people try to talk to others because then no one will talk to them even when they finally tried to have a conversation.
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Silveranna Featured By Owner Edited Aug 21, 2014
It used to annoy me on a daily basis in High School how people would comment stuff like:
"Wow that's a big book! How are you not bored by it? I can't read anything thing that big! blahblahblahblahblah"

I'd be sitting there, eye twitching as I gave the person my best death glare thinking:
"Shut the F up! I am reading you uncultured dumbass and you just interrupted the climax! AGAIN! >:0
You ignore me or ruin my existence for nearly a decade or more, and the one time you finally talk to me it's only to prove how stupid you actually are and that all the effort I used to make trying to be one of you truly was wasted."

and they'll still be talking and I'd have no idea no idea what they were saying because it became noises after the first few seconds.
YOLO luckily wasn't a thing until long after my school years ended.
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student Writer
Yeah, I'm a outcast myself... It's not very fun.
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Mezzoak1876 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2015  Hobbyist
It isn't, walking around, wondering when you will actually have a friend even though you try sooooooooooooooooo hard to find a friend, and after years and years of trying, you actually succeed, only to feel like your too close, like your clinging to them and it doesn't feel right.
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blessedout Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's good to read... but I understand what you mean. It's like people don't know what to do when a quiet person talks. They should just treat them like anyone else, and TALK to the quiet person! :)
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