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There's a party in my head
As I close my eyes to sleep.

Little creatures and monsters,
Oh, back and forth they creep.

On silent tip-toes they walk,
Playing melodies in my mind.

Finding caverns I have closed,
Putting my life on rewind.

My mind is somewhere else,
But in vain I toss and turn.

Little goblins man the lights,
And the ghosts try to learn.

It's all a big, loud, unruly mess,
This untamed party in my head.

I try and shut them down,
But back and forth they tread.

I'm never going to get any sleep
As long as they're awake.

They take my tired thoughts
Down every path they can take.

Oh, what would I give to have
One silent and sleep-filled night.

But that will never happen,
Although I wish with all my might.

There's a party in my head
As I close my eyes to sleep.

Only when the sun comes up
Do they never make a peep.
I hate insomnia. 
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Student General Artist
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You've perfectly captured what it is.
And it's dark, and fun, and weird and rhymes.
Wow.
How'd you manage to write it down? (n.n)
Lovely work.
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Student Writer
I'm not sure how I managed to write it down, actually. It just kinda... came out. And thank you!
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Student General Artist
Well you did a perfect job at it,
and no problem dear <3
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PeggytheDragon Featured By Owner May 1, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Wow this poem is amazing it perfectly describes what goes on in my head because I have insomnia. I love it! Keep it up! :D 
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner May 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you~
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PeggytheDragon Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Your welcome :)
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Xbeing Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Exactly, try to sleep alllll night, then finally when youre about to, the suns already coming up .-.    
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Student Writer
Yepp, and everybody's yelling at you to get out of bed.
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Xbeing Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Mhm, exactly :sleepy: :sleepy: remake :countsheeps: 
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carolgregoire Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Well written, good flow
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