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There's a party in my head
As I close my eyes to sleep.

Little creatures and monsters,
Oh, back and forth they creep.

On silent tip-toes they walk,
Playing melodies in my mind.

Finding caverns I have closed,
Putting my life on rewind.

My mind is somewhere else,
But in vain I toss and turn.

Little goblins man the lights,
And the ghosts try to learn.

It's all a big, loud, unruly mess,
This untamed party in my head.

I try and shut them down,
But back and forth they tread.

I'm never going to get any sleep
As long as they're awake.

They take my tired thoughts
Down every path they can take.

Oh, what would I give to have
One silent and sleep-filled night.

But that will never happen,
Although I wish with all my might.

There's a party in my head
As I close my eyes to sleep.

Only when the sun comes up
Do they never make a peep.
I hate insomnia. 
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Viking-Unicorn Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. Just wow. You described insomnia perfectly.
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Reem1996 Featured By Owner May 17, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So beautifully written!
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner May 29, 2015  Student Writer
Thank you!
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:iconchocicynic:
chocicynic Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome work. Captured and rhymed it very well.
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Student General Artist
...
You've perfectly captured what it is.
And it's dark, and fun, and weird and rhymes.
Wow.
How'd you manage to write it down? (n.n)
Lovely work.
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Student Writer
I'm not sure how I managed to write it down, actually. It just kinda... came out. And thank you!
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:icon237-indefinitetruth:
237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Student General Artist
Well you did a perfect job at it,
and no problem dear <3
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PeggytheDragon Featured By Owner May 1, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Wow this poem is amazing it perfectly describes what goes on in my head because I have insomnia. I love it! Keep it up! :D 
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner May 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you~
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:iconpeggythedragon:
PeggytheDragon Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Your welcome :)
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Xbeing Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Exactly, try to sleep alllll night, then finally when youre about to, the suns already coming up .-.    
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Student Writer
Yepp, and everybody's yelling at you to get out of bed.
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:iconxbeing:
Xbeing Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Mhm, exactly :sleepy: :sleepy: remake :countsheeps: 
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carolgregoire Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Well written, good flow
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Aythreuk Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014
Love it, really flows.
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you~
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Morrigan94 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
great work :) (Smile)  and so true  
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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CreativeSoul007 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Student General Artist
So true. Insomnia's a bitch.
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Student Writer
It is...
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divoha4-1 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Student General Artist
So true
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Student Writer
sad nod 
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divoha4-1 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Student General Artist
I have it not fun for me :(
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Indigo-Moon-Shadow Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this :3 I'm a fan of couplets like those.
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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endlessstarryskies Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Student General Artist
My favorite line is: "My mind is somewhere else,
But in vain I toss and turn." Great job! Keep the creativity going!
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you, I'll try to!
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endlessstarryskies Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Student General Artist
Your welcome :)
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mythgirl61 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I have slight insomnia, I can sleep at night, but never until little past midnight.
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
For me, it always depends. I'll go for one or two weeks without sleeping at all, then I'll be able to sleep until it happens again.
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ViciousGalan Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Great work, love the continued metaphor all the way through.
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! Lovely Shoujo Emoji (Huggy Hug) [V2] 
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LynkNevers Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the last 2 lines. I have insomnia and I can only fall a sleep when the sun comes up. Sometimes I feel like a vampire lol.
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kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
It does kinda make me feel like a vampire. It's like, if I'm not gonna be able to sleep at night, at least make me look hot or be able to do something cool.
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StellaStarfish Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student General Artist
Right there with you on this one. insomnia sucks. this poem, not so much (actually this poem is fantastic, just thought you should know :)
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! Insomnia is just... no fun.
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lemonsandlemonade7 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
o_o This totally reminds me of Ice Pick Lodge's game Knock Knock. (B Excellent work!
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
Does it? And thank you!
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lemonsandlemonade7 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
:) You're welcome!
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Kinglorshi Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student Writer
You got me at "monsters in my head". This is very straightforward but full of imagery, and it gave me an idea, which is always a good quality, I think...

Keep writing and coming up with art!
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you, and I will!
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:iconkinglorshi:
Kinglorshi Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
No problem! :la:
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FireflyElixer Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
This is so fantastic! :D LOVEITTTT
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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SerpentShield Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
Whoa. Stunning work! 0_0
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! Anime Emoji (Oh yay dance) [V2] 
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KittySib Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome poem! :D
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:iconkiwiootori:
kiwiootori Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you~
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